Talk:Khalid ibn al-Walid/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Pyrotec (talk) 17:30, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I will review. Pyrotec (talk) 17:30, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments[edit]

Sorry for the delay in getting to this stage. I've now read the article (quickly) a couple of times and I've formed the impression that its about GA-level, possibly on its way to being a WP:FAC; but this review will only be considering it as a WP:GAN. There is at least one phrase that I don't like; but it seems to be well referenced and well-illustrated so I don't expect there will be too many problems.

Tomorrow, I will start the detailed review, but leaving the WP:Lead until last. At this stage I will be mostly concentrating on "problems", so I might not have much to comment on - but we will see. Pyrotec (talk) 21:00, 9 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]


Thanks for the comments..

الله أكبرMohammad Adil 18:32, 10 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Early life -
  • Just a statement of curiosity. The desert is described as: "clear, dry and unpolluted air": perhaps so but there could be dust and sand storms.
  • Muhammad's era (610–632) -
  • Looks OK.
  • Abu Bakr's era (632–634) -
    • Conquest of Arabia -
  • checkY Pyrotec (talk) 21:20, 12 July 2010 (UTC) - In ".... Khalid defeated Tulaiha,[26] a main rebel leader who claimed prophethood as a means to draw support for himself. His power was crushed after his remaining followers were defeated at the Battle of Ghamra.[24] Kalid ....", I assume that "His" referes to Tulaiha. Perhaps "His" could be replaced by Tulaiha?[reply]

....to be continued. Pyrotec (talk) 20:43, 10 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well in early life section, "clear" not clear in the sense that you can see clear blue sky ... it has been used to describe the environmental conditions.

I have replaced "his" with "tulaiha", as it may creates confusions for new readers. الله أكبرMohammad Adil 21:13, 10 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Pyrotec (talk) 21:12, 12 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sorry, my geography is not too good in this area, is "state of Madinah" a typo (Madina appears eslewhere)?
    • Invasion of Persian Empire & Invasion of Eastern Roman Empire -
  • These two subsections look OK.

....to be continued. Pyrotec (talk) 21:20, 12 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

State of Madinah refers to the small state created during the time of Prophet Mohammad. Madinah is the alternative spelling of Madina, as the spelling format should be same, so i have corrected it now as "state of Madina"

الله أكبرMohammad Adil 17:05, 13 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Pyrotec (talk) 19:46, 13 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Caliph Umar's era (634–642) -
    • Conquest of Central Levant -
  • I think a unit of measurement is missing after 50 in this sentence: "Soon after the appointment of Abu-Ubaidah as commander in chief, he sent a small detachment to the annual fair held at Abu-al-Quds, modern day Abla, near Zahle 50 east of Beirut."
  • In the same paragraph, I suggest that "it" is clarified (its probably the force, not the garrison): "Before it would have been completely destroyed, Abu Ubaidah, having received new intelligence ...."

Pyrotec (talk) 20:02, 13 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Stopping at this point. It a GA. Pyrotec (talk) 20:02, 13 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Overall summary[edit]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

A Good Article; and in my oppinion a WP:FAC.

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:
    B. MoS compliance:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:
    Well referenced.
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
    Well referenced.
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    Well-illustrated with route maps that contribute to the overall understanding of the article.
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
    Well-illustrated with route maps that contribute to the overall understanding of the article.
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:

I'm awarding this article GA-status. I beleive that it could make WP:FAC, but submitting to WP:PR first would help in identifying any areas of grammar that might to be improved. Congratulations on producing an informative historical article. Pyrotec (talk) 20:02, 13 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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