Talk:John Mercer Johnson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:31, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "and a Father of Confederation.[1] He represented" why is that the only clause in the lead cited? If it's cited in the main body, remove the cite from here.
  • Done
• "He..." is the start of about half a dozen sentences in the lead, mix it up, perhaps starting sometimes with his surname.
  • Done
• Was the "Legislative Assembly of New Brunswick" part of the "Parliament of Canada"? Parliament of Canada is mentioned in the infobox but not the lead.
  • No. New Brunswick is a province in Canada. His election to the Parliament of Canada is mentioned in the sentence that starts with, "In the first parliament for the country of Canada..." Z1720 (talk) 22:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
• "His father was also named John Mercer Johnson, and he was a merchant and public official in Chatham, New Brunswick" so when did they move to Canada?
• Okay, you say that next sentence. Chronology makes for odd reading for me.
  • I think his father emmigrated to Canada before the rest of the family, which is why the chronology is a little off. Z1720 (talk) 22:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
• "a belief that bumps on the skull can predict mental illness" not just illness, I thought it was a pseudo science that enabled "believers" to determine all sorts of traits about a person...
  • Changed "illness" to "traits" Z1720 (talk) 22:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
• "Chatham, New Brunswick" should be linked in the infobox.
  • Done
• "from Northumberland County" it was just "Northumberland" in the lead.
  • Added "county" in the lede.
• "considered a liberal candidate" shouldn't that, in this case, be Liberal?
  • He didn't run in an official capacity as a Liberal, so in this case is it referring to the political ideology and not the political party. The source lists it as a small-l so I want to keep it that way in the article. Z1720 (talk) 22:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
• "premiership" link.
  • Wikilinked to List of premiers of New Brunswick
• "Conservative" you linked (L/l)iberal, so be consistent.
  • Conservative is now conservative, I did a ctrl+f for all cases of conservative and liberal, and only kept the capitalisation for mention of the federal parties, which were organised into political parties at this time. Z1720 (talk) 22:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
• "to be the attorney general under the " isn't there a link to the AG of Canada (if, indeed, that's the position here)?
  • He was AG of New Brunswick, not Canada. Z1720 (talk) 22:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
• "by two gentlemen" people, we know nothing about them!
  • I added wikililnks for the two people who are blocking him. Z1720 (talk) 22:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
• "eastern British colonies of North America" link?
  • Wikilinked to The Maritimes
• Charlottetown - link for the place?
  • I changed it to "In the Charlottetown Conference" because that is what was introduced earlier in the paragraph.
• "for Northumberland County in " link before.
  • I have kept the link, as it is to the federal constituency. Instead, I added a link to the Northumberland provincial constituency earlier in the article. In case there is any confusion, he was elected as one of the two representatives for the Northumberland (provincial electoral district) to the New Brunswick Legislature in 1850, then elected in the Northumberland federal electoral district in 1867, which should not be confused with Northumberland (Ontario electoral district).
• "Mitchell were given the moniker "the Northumberland County Smashers" for" this appears to be covered, although slightly differently, in the preceding sections.
  • The Smashers administration, the moniker given to the executive council of New Brunswick in 1854, is different from "the Northumberland County Smashers", a moniker given to Mitchell and Johnson for their work in the Canadian Parliament in 1867.
• "they had twelve children.[2] Only six children survived into adulthood" -> "they had twelve children,[2] of which six survived into adulthood"
  • Done
• "the order in council for" usually an Order in Council...
  • Wiki-article agrees with the capitalisation, so done. Z1720 (talk) 22:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
• Format ISBNs consistently.
  • Done
• Refs 1, 13, 16 en-dash, not spaced hyphen.
  • They seem to already have the en-dash. Maybe I'm doing something wrong, or it was fixed already? Z1720 (talk) 22:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:12, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Responses above. Thanks for doing this review. Z1720 (talk) 22:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)