Talk:I Love You (2NE1 song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:18, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

My second time reviewing an article for you; happy New Year! --K. Peake 12:18, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead[edit]

Remove venue parameter because that is for live recordings only
Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
A number of the genres listed are not sourced anywhere in the body
"South Korean girl group 2NE1." → "South Korean girl group 2NE1 from the Japanese edition of their third and final studio album, Crush (2014)." for proper context and the edition part makes it clear it is the Japanese version included on the release
- Not done Not sure about this since the song was mainly promoted as a standalone single during the duration of its run and wasn't included in the album until many comebacks later
"The original Korean version was released" → "The Korean version was released"
"digital download and streaming on July 5, 2012 by" → "digital download and streaming as a single on July 5, 2012, through" with the targets and changing to "through" to avoid repetitive wording
"of the track" → "of the song"
"The track was written," → "The song was written," but there is a rule that anything written in the lead needs to also be written in the body, so the composition and arrangement parts need to be written in prose there despite already being sourced from personnel
- I just replaced it instead with info on its production, since its the same person for both versions and a lot of people contributed to the songwriting.
"with additional composition by" → "with additional composition from"
"Musically, "I Love You" incorporates elements of" → ""I Love You" incorporates elements of" since "musically" is a term that is appropriate for usage in the body, not lead; however, dance-pop is not sourced anywhere in the body
"generally positive reviews from critics," → "generally positive reviews from music critics,"
"The single ranked as the best" → "The song was ranked as the best"
Popjustice should not be italicised and remove the Billboard ranking since there's only two cited in the article, so they shouldn't both be mentioned in the lead
- Not done I included both of the Billboard rankings in the lead and left out Popjustice as Billboard is more well-known and reliable

Nkon21 This is fine; my point was that two year-end lists was too much for the lead but it's fine with one and a decade-end list. --K. Peake 08:21, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"and became the group's sixth number-one single. It went on" → "and becoming the group's sixth number one single. "I Love You" went on"
"by the end of year, making it one of the best-selling singles in the country in 2012." → "by the end of 2012, making it one of the best-selling singles of 2012 in South Korea."
Target Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
"marking the group's first" → "marking 2NE1's first"
"the song peaked at number 5" → "the song peaked at number five" per MOS:NUM
Mention the music video after the commercial performance here, before ending this para with a mention of a live performance (maybe during the tour if that is the most notable... you are the expert on this article's subject so you will be better to decide?)

Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:25, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Background and release[edit]

"that 2NE1 will make a comeback" → "that 2NE1 would make a comeback"
"new single titled "I Love You"" → "new single entitled "I Love You"" with the target
Target Korean-language to Korean language
None of the sentences in the section's opening para apart from the above one and the music video one are backed up by the sources; make sure to fix this
- I removed the sentence about Dara since I couldn't find any reliable sources to back it up
"member Dara posted" → "group member Dara posted"
"what they have done" → "what they had done"
"suggested that it will be a genre at all ages" → "suggested for it to be a genre all ages"
"simultaneously with its..." replace this with "as a single." to finish the sentence, plus remove all of the music video info from here and move the streaming charts info to the music video section
"premiered digitally on August 29" → "premiered digitally on August 29, 2012"
"as the group's third official Japanese single" → "as the group's third Japanese single" with the target
"on September 19 through" → "on September 19, through"
Target CD to Compact disc
Wikilink DVD
"The Japanese version of the song was later included in the Japanese edition of the group's second studio album titled" → ""I Love You" was later included on the Japanese edition of 2NE1's second studio album" because this para is entirely about the Japanese version and the edition part makes it especially obvious, though writing "Japanese version" again is overkill

Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:25, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Composition[edit]

Retitle to Composition and lyrics
Add more info for the text of the audio sample
The first two sentences should be in the opening section instead
"who had worked on many of" → "who had worked on much of"
"and has a runtime of 3:57." → "and has a length of 3:57."
"Musically, the song combines" → "Musically, "I Love You" combines" and this should be the first sentence of the section instead
"Eurodance and traditional" → "Eurodance, and traditional"
"contrasting the styles" → "contrasting with the styles"
Are you sure there's no info about the chorus to add?
- None that I can find in reliable sources at the moment.
Wikilink press release
Target hip-hop to Hip hop music
Target R&B to Contemporary R&B
"trot instrumentals in the song" → "trot instrumentation in the song"
"throughout the 20th century." → "throughout the 2000s."
- 20th century is 1900-2000

Nkon21 Sorry, got mixed up here briefly; change to "the 1900s". --K. Peake 08:21, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"has been described as an confession song," → "is a confession song,"
"with the members' singing:" → "the members sing:"
"faith like this"." → "faith like this."" since that is a full quote
Target rock to Rock music
Target acoustic to Acoustic music

Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:58, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Reception[edit]

Rather than having the domestic and international reception sub-sections, set the critical reception as the first para and follow it with the commercial reception paras, though the reception in South Korea will be the first commercial para in this order
"South Korean daily charts including Melon and Mnet and" → "South Korean daily charts, including Melon and Mnet, and"
"debuted at number 2" → "debuted at number two"
"dropped to number 3 on the chart," → "descended to number 3,"
"the best-selling song of the month." → "the best-selling song of July 2012."
"and ranked number six" → "and ranked at number six"
Wikilink Kesha and David Guetta on the img text
"received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
Remove "internationally" term because there are not separate reviews from South Korean sources
Remove "the American music magazine" and any other introductions to publications
Target pop to Pop music
"and compared the production similar to that" → "and compared the production to that"
The synths comparison can stay here, but why have you not mentioning the song as including synths anywhere in the comp section?
"to that of" → "to those of"
Popjustice should not be italicised
"ranked the song" → "ranked the song as"
"cavalcade of amazingness."" → "cavalcade of amazingness"."
"as one of their finest works and" → "as one of 2NE1's finest works, and"
"Commercially, "I Love You" peaked at" → ""I Love You" peaked at"
Copies sold in the US is unsourced
Wikilink airplay
"the song peaked at number 5" → "the song peaked at number five"

Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:58, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Accolades[edit]

There is no need for tables when only one or two accolades exist; the Popjustice and Billboard decade-end list are written out in prose in the reception section, so the other Billboard ranking should be as well. Also, retitle this to Awards because only they will be left and make it a sub-section.
- I didn't make it a sub-section as the table's header is sufficient enough in my opinion

Nkon21 I would understand that comment if this was about making a section out of the awards, but it's only a sub-section; they obviously have no place in commercial reception like you have done. --K. Peake 08:21, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Centre the table's refs

Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:58, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]