Talk:IBM Palm Top PC 110/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:18, 1 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

I think the could be touch longer, two more sentences?
Why only one claim of the lead referenced? That can probably be referenced in the main body of the article.
Link lithium-ion.
"the JIS format" use the expanded version before initialism.
"PC Card slots" link?
"parallel and serial" also link?
"then-aging Intel 486SX with" instead of "then-aging" can we say how long that chip had been around?
" 4.7 in " convert.
"dual-scan passive-matrix LCD " link?
"swing-out modem jack" what?
"popular ThinkPad 200 subnotebook " link?
Avoid single-sentence paras.

That's all I have on a first read through. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 16:07, 2 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @The Rambling Man, thanks for your review, I will try to finish it on time. Regarding the JIS format, I have changed the link to a different article, but I think that the abbreviation is the well known name for this type of keyboard, instead of the full name. PhotographyEdits (talk) 15:46, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man

Done, I think that all issues you have pointed out have been addressed. I have changed my mind on the previous comment and added the full name. PhotographyEdits (talk) 15:21, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]