Talk:Hussein of Jordan/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 08:10, 6 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 08:10, 6 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria[edit]

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
2
2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y (Several are in the 40% range, but they are PD.)
3
3.a Y

3.b Y
4
4.a Y
5
5.a Y
6
6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No Dead links Y

Prose Suggestions[edit]

Lede[edit]

The lede technically violates MOS:LEADLENGTH, as it is four paragraphs with only 10,000 words. If there is a way for you to combine these without losing content, please do so, otherwise, WP:IAR.
In 1952, when he was a 17-year old schoolboy, suggest changing this to In 1952, at the age of 17,.
and a large Palestinian refugee population resulting from the 1948 Arab–Israeli War. suggest and a large Palestinian refugee population as a result of the 1948 Arab–Israeli War.

Early life[edit]

crown prince Talal and Zein Al-Sharaf. in the lede Zein Al-Sharaf is called princess in the lede, suggest doing the same here.
did not see in his two sons Talal and Nayef features of kingship, suggest did not see in his two sons Talal and Nayef potential for kingship,

Reign[edit]

Accession[edit]

the Parliament forced King Talal to abdicate owing to his mental state suggest the Parliament forced King Talal to abdicate due to his mental state
He was enthroned on 2 May 1953; his cousin Faisal II assumed his constitutional powers as king in Iraq on the same day. suggest He was enthroned on 2 May 1953, the same day that his cousin Faisal II assumed his constitutional powers as king in Iraq.

A liberal experiment[edit]

but then Nabulsi presented a new list, which Hussein refused to act upon. suggest however Nabulsi then presented an expanded list, which Hussein refused to act upon.

Arab Federation between Iraq and Jordan[edit]

a Nasser-supported regime suggest a Nasserist regime

Illness[edit]

He stayed away from Jordan in the clinic until the end of 1998, suggest He stayed at the clinic until the end of 1998,

Personal life[edit]

which inspired the name for Jordan's first cubesat, planned for launch in 2018. suggest which inspired the name for Jordan's first cubesat, whose launch is planned to take place in 2018.
@Makeandtoss: That is all my comments, passing now. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 15:09, 6 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I happen to know that Hussein was very generous to Lady Glubb, the widow of Glubb Pasha. She lived in a large house in Mayfield, E. Sussex, and he spent a great deal of money on its maintenance. He would visit incognito, flying himself to a small airfield not far away, and then driving himself in a very ordinary car. This is all OR, no doubt. Seadowns (talk) 23:24, 11 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]