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Nominator: UndercoverClassicist (talk · contribs) 10:22, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: The Morrison Man (talk · contribs) 21:33, 19 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]


I'll be taking a look at the article and should be back with comments in the next few days. The Morrison Man (talk) 21:33, 19 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking it on: looking forward to your comments. UndercoverClassicist T·C 09:15, 20 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@The Morrison Man: Sorry to nudge, but any update? UndercoverClassicist T·C 11:51, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Apologies for the major delay, I've been quite sick recently. I've included the notes for the sections composition and collection and transmission below, the rest will follow within 24 hours. If you have any questions or things are unclear, let me know! The Morrison Man (talk) 22:40, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks -- replies below to this first batch, looking forward to the second. UndercoverClassicist T·C 08:52, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I've addressed these comments where required. The next batch will be up in a few hours. The Morrison Man (talk) 12:38, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@The Morrison Man: No rush, but any news on those? UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:28, 10 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It seems I forgot to publish my edit, I'll get them to you ASAP. Apologies for the late reply, my internet has been out for the past two days. The Morrison Man (talk) 14:50, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
My sincerest apologies for taking this long. I've published the rest of my comments with this edit. Having looked over the entire article, it adheres to the GA criteria. When we've worked through this last set of comments I will be able to pass it. The Morrison Man (talk) 22:49, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Composition[edit]

  • “though the Hymn to Ares is considerably later” - Maybe change this to something like “though the Hymn to Ares was made much later”.
  • “are composed in dactylic hexameter” - Perhaps this could be explained, as you do for the following mention of formulae.
  • “one of the Homeridae,” - Swap out the comma for a colon.
    • I'm not sure the colon would be wrong, but a comma is perfectly correct here and reads better to me. UndercoverClassicist T·C 08:52, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • “hymns’ comparative absence” - Comparative could probably be left out here.
    • It can't, unfortunately, as Callimachus makes use of them (see Reception further down for a few more). However, by comparison with the Iliad and Odyssey, their footprint in Alexandrian poetry is tiny. UndercoverClassicist T·C 08:52, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • “However, few direct statements denying Homer's authorship of the Hymns survive from antiquity: in the second century CE, the Greek geographer Pausanias maintained their attribution to Homer.” - I think this would work better as two separate sentences, cut off at the colon. That would make something like: “However, few direct statements denying Homer’s authorship of the Hymns survive from antiquity. The Greek geographer Pausanias maintained their attribution to Homer in the second century CE.”.
    • I'm not sure it would, as the second part follows from the first: with a full stop, the thought becomes isolated and the connection lost. It's not the shortest sentence, but I don't think it's long enough at 27 words to make splitting it essential. UndercoverClassicist T·C 08:52, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      • Looking over the sentence again, I'm not really sure why I even suggested splitting in the first place. The connection is indeed enough reason to keep them it as a single unit. The Morrison Man (talk) 12:38, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Collection and transmission[edit]

  • “At least the longer hymns” - Leave out at least.
    • That would change the meaning, since we don't know that the shorter hymns were not also included in these editions. UndercoverClassicist T·C 08:52, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • There are now two conflicting timespans for the Hellenistic period in the article. Previously mentioned as post-323 BCE, and here mentioned as 323-30 BCE. The latter is correct, and I’d change the former accordingly.
  • “listed as today "Homeric"” - “which we currently list as “Homeric””
    • I've changed to listed today as, which is more grammatical, but am not a fan of the second-person plural here: it would raise a question as to who "we" are and aren't. UndercoverClassicist T·C 08:52, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      • An alternative could be "which are currently listed as "Homeric"", which omits "we". The Morrison Man (talk) 12:38, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
        Not sure what the improvement over "today" is? To me, "currently" implies that the situation might soon change (compare "Today, he lives in London" and "Currently, he lives in London"). UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:07, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
        I mostly made the suggestion while considering the possibility that some of the Hymns aren't from the same author, though assuming that the name won't change, today works fine. The Morrison Man (talk) 13:32, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
        Oh, the Hymns certainly aren't the work of a single author, but we don't really think of "Homer" as a single author now anyway, so the label is unlikely to go anywhere even though discussions about the Hymns' dates and circumstances of composition are likely to continue. UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:36, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Perhaps also link Callimachus here, and is there no bluelink for Proclus or his Hymns?
    • Could link Callimachus, but it's not a million miles away from his first mention, so I'm not sure I see a compelling case to break the usual habit of linking only on first mention, or where a link is particularly helpful. Linked Proclus; "Hymns (Proclus)" isn't an article yet, and I'm not sure it's ever likely to become one distinct from the main Proclus article. UndercoverClassicist T·C 08:52, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      • My line of thinking was that an extra link would be good to have to allow for easier navigation to the other works that were included alongside the Homeric Hymns in the editions originating from the fourth to thirteenth century. The Morrison Man (talk) 12:38, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
        • I've tried something slightly different, and created the redirect Hymns (Callimachus), which currently links to the Hymns section of Callimachus's article. How's that? I think it does the same job and potentially allows someone to come along and write a whole article on them. UndercoverClassicist T·C 16:12, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
          In my opinion this is the most elegant solution! Nicely found. The Morrison Man (talk) 21:32, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • “are fifteenth-century in date” - date to the fifteenth century
  • “along with Orphic and other hymnic poetry.” - along with other Hymns and Orphic poetry.
  • Explain siglum in brackets.
    • I can't immediately think of a good, short way to do it: we need "conventional symbol indicating the name of a manuscript", which is a bit long for brackets. To me, it's pretty clear to any reader that the character Ω is whatever a siglum is: it's not massively important that they understand it as meaning anything more than letter/symbol/designation, so I think we've got the right balance where those who just want to read the article have what they need to do so, and those who want to go further can click the link.
      • Your reasoning is sound, though I do believe an explanation would add some extra value. Would the shorter "symbol indicating a manuscript" work, or is that too abbreviated? The Morrison Man (talk) 12:38, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link philologist
  • “discovered M” - maybe change to “discovered manuscript M”? (not essential)
    • We introduced it in the previous sentence, and "manuscript M" is not idiomatic (it's also arguably a tautology), so I think what we have at the moment is better. UndercoverClassicist T·C 08:52, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • “M has among its sources a lost manuscript” - “One of the sources M draws from is a lost manuscript”
    • I'm not seeing a problem or improvement here?
      • Mostly related to the flow of the sentence, which in my opinion is better with the proposed change. If you disagree, its fine to keep the original. The Morrison Man (talk) 12:38, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • “which he stated he had” - “which he stated to have”
  • “that manuscript has also been suggested as being Ω” - “it has also been suggested that Ψ and Ω represent the same manuscript”
    • Ah, that's not quite what I meant: the question is whether Aurispa was writing about Ψ οr Ω, but they're definitely different manuscripts. I've clarified, hopefully. UndercoverClassicist T·C 08:52, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

more to follow

Function[edit]

  • “They seem originally to have” - They seem to have originally functioned
  • “Originally, they appear to have been performed by singers accompanying themselves on a stringed instrument” - Could it be beneficial to list a few examples here? Just so people have a better idea of what instruments were being used at the time.

Reception[edit]

Antiquity[edit]

  • Maybe link lyric poetry?
  • Also link Dionysus, Dioscuri and Hermes.
  • “Few secure references” - Maybe change to something like Few confirmed references? Not sure that secure conveys what you're trying to say (which I assume is cases where we know for certain that the reference points to the Homeric Hymns).
    • "Secure" is typical in the literature for this kind of thing (as in "the evidence/case against him is secure": "confirmed", as a passive participle, has the problem that it implies that someone has confirmed them, which isn't the case. I've tried "definite" -- as you say, the point is that we're not always sure whether the reference is to the Hymn itself, or simply to the story that is the source of the Hymn. UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:16, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • “while the didactic poem Phainomena by Aratus drew on the same poem” - and the didactic poem Phainomena by Aratus drew on the same hymn.
  • Link mythographer, if possible.
    • Hm: it only links to myth, at least at the moment, which I think would not be particularly useful (MOS:OVERLINK advises us to avoid linking common words unless they're being used in an unusual fashion) and would create a WP:SEAOFBLUE, which is also discouraged. In this instance, I think the costs outweigh the benefits: the word itself isn't particularly common, but "myth" is, and the -ographer suffix is also pretty widely understood.
  • Link Apollo
  • Some of the hymn titles are italicised, others are not. I’d suggest making this consistent throughout.
    • Where the title itself is used (e.g. Later in the Aeneid, the account of the theft of Hercules's cattle by the monster Cacus is based upon that of the theft of Apollo's cattle by Hermes in the Homeric Hymn to Hermes, it is italicised. Where the words "hymn(s) to X" are used simply as a description (e.g. His own works quoted from the hymns to Demeter and Apollo, it isn't, and "hymn" is lc. I think this is consistent; let me know if I've missed any. UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:16, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Late Antiquity to Renaissance[edit]

  • “Other poets of the fifth century onwards, such as Musaeus Grammaticus and Coluthus, made use of them.” - I feel like the sentence doesn’t read very smoothly, maybe this could work better in a structure like: “Other poets such as Musaeus Grammaticus and Coluthus made use of them from the fifth century onwards.”
    • Good in itself, but would create a problem with the preceding sentence: In late antiquity, the direct influence of the Homeric Hymns was comparatively limited until the fifth century CE .... The problem is that the sharp line at the end of the fifth century, which we need for modern readers, is artificial and doesn't mean much for the people and poems involved here. UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:16, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      • Alternative: From the fifth century onwards, other poets such as Musaeus Grammaticus and Coluthus made use of them., maybe this works better with the preceding sentence? The Morrison Man (talk) 13:51, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
        I think that's workable: changed. UndercoverClassicist T·C 15:33, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is there a link for Poemata Arcana?
  • It would probably be good to link Byzantine period.
  • Link Paul Silentiarius if possible.
  • I think the commas can be removed from the sentence starting with “The sixth-century poet…
    • The first can; removed. Also removed "hexameter", since not all of it was in that metre. UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:16, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • “Other, later authors, such as the eleventh-century Michael Psellos, may have drawn upon them,” - “Other, later authors such as the eleventh-century Michael Psellos may have drawn upon them,”
    • Done a slightly different way: removed the "other" (the same author could hardly be later). UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:16, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove the comma between manuscript and known.
  • “commissioned by the Catholic cardinal Bessarion probably in the 1460s” - “probably commissioned by the Catholic cardinal Bessarion in the 1460s”
    • No: it was definitely commissioned by Bessarion, but not definitely in the 1460s. UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:16, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      • Whoops, my restructure changed the meaning. Would probably commissioned in the 1460s by the Catholic cardinal Bessarion work as an alternative? The Morrison Man (talk) 13:51, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
        Still ambiguous, unfortunately (was it probably commissioned, maybe made voluntarily, but definitely in the 1460s?). UndercoverClassicist T·C 15:33, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
        Ohwell, lets keep the sentence in its current form then. The Morrison Man (talk) 19:30, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • “and was in turn” - Wouldn’t ‘and were in turn’ be the proper form here? Considering we’re talking about multiple Stanzas for the Joust.

Early modern period onwards[edit]

  • I think the commas can be removed from the first sentence.
  • “In January 1818” - Could be changed to “In January of the same year”, if you want.
    • Probably, but then there would be a slight ambiguity as to whether it was the same year as the adapting or the publishing. UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:16, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • “the debate into the nature” - Shouldn’t this be the debate on?
    • "As to" is better, I think: I've done with that for now ("debate into X" is used in HQRS, but rarely). UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:16, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

List of the Homeric Hymns[edit]

  • What is the reasoning for redlinking some names of individual Hymns but not others?
    • The Hymns have wildly different lengths and literary/scholarly impact. The Hymn to Demeter could very easily be a very long article, as could the Hymn to Aphrodite and the Hymn to Hermes: all are very regularly discussed in scholarship, sometimes at book length, and have had reasonably large cultural influence. Others, such as the Hymn to Dionysus are comparatively short and have not had those things. It might be possible to write a GNG-keeping article on some of them (particularly the longer Dionysus hymn), but I've chosen to redlink only those which I think have really compelling cases. Some, like the Hymn to Hosts, haven't a snowball's chance unless a whole new branch of scholarship springs up. UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:16, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      • Ah, ok. So the largest hymns / the ones with the most scholarly coverage (and thus the most chance of getting seperate articles) have been linked. The Morrison Man (talk) 13:51, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
        Absolutely. UndercoverClassicist T·C 15:38, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

That's all of my comments. Thank you for your patience and once again apologies for taking so long to review. The Morrison Man (talk) 22:49, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

All very much appreciated: replies above and edits in the article. UndercoverClassicist T·C 13:16, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Most of the comments were taken care of nicely, I've left a few more reactions and some further comments based on your replies. The Morrison Man (talk) 13:51, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Back to you: I think I've got all of those. UndercoverClassicist T·C 15:38, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
That covers all of my comments then! Considering that the article passes all six Good Article Criteria, I'll pass it shortly. The Morrison Man (talk) 19:32, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The article has now been listed as a GA. Congratulations, and thank you once again for your patience during the review process!! (If you ever find yourself in need of a reviewer in the future, don't hesitate to leave a message on my talk page :)) The Morrison Man (talk) 19:38, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for your efforts, wisdom and sharp eyes throughout: as is the way with the best reviews, I think the article has improved a great deal for the process. Likewise, do drop me a message if you'd like me to return the favour for one of your nominations. UndercoverClassicist T·C 21:26, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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