Talk:Doylestown Central Park

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The article has a really strong introduction. I think it would be helpful to clearly say what state it is in in the first or second sentence. I kind of think you can remove the general section of the Park Amenities portion, it gets a little repetitive with the rest of that portion. I assume you just haven’t filled in the bits on the trails and castle yet which is totally fine, but just in case definitely make sure you do! The article is well organized and has a lot of good headlines, just needs to be filled in. It could also be interesting to add a section on the history of the park! It looks like it is missing a few citations, for example the last 2 sentences in the amphitheater section do not have a citation, but it looks great overall! Hope this helps :) Jeouellette (talk) 21:15, 15 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I like this article and believe that you will have covered all of the important parts once all of the sections are filled in. I have a comment about the amphitheater section. I think you could rephrase and say "20 years worth of fundraising" if that is what you mean. If not, then that sentence is confusing and you should probably rewrite it. Overall though, it is well written. I think adding a few pictures of the park, especially the caste or amphitheater would also make it better Jmwood48 (talk) 19:20, 17 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]