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"the track "Island" was released as a single before the band" → "the track "Island" was released as the lead single from Direction before the Starting Line" with the appropriate target
"the following month. A music video for "Island" was released before Direction's release on July 31, 2007" → "the following month, during which a music video for the track was released" with the appropriate wikilink
"Direction sold 20,000 copies in its first week" → "The album sold 20,000 first-week copies in the US"
"the Billboard 200 and received a mostly positive reception" → "the Billboard 200, and received mostly positive reviews"
"complimenting the band's growth and the album's catchy songs" → "complimenting the Starting Line's growth and the catchy songs"
"and co-headlined a US tour with Paramore" → "and co-headlined a tour in the country with Paramore, both of which were in the fall of 2007"
"In Australia in early 2008, the Starting Line performed at Soundwave Festival prior" → "In early 2008, the Starting Line performed at the Soundwave Festival in Australia, prior"
[6][7] should both be solely at the end of the sentence in the new order
"it was announced the band" → "it was announced that the Starting Line"
"signed the group after" → "signed the band after"
"Between early February and early April 2006" → "Between the early periods of both February and April 2006"
"during the tour, the band's guitarist" → "during the tour, the guitarist"
"Schmutz was still a touring member but was expected" → "Schmutz was still a touring member and was expected"
"Following the tour's conclusion, the group" → "Following the tour's conclusion, the band"
"to write their next record" → "for writing the album"
"the group wrote new material and demoed songs" → "the Starting Line wrote new material and recorded demos of songs"
"By August" → "By August of that year"
Are you sure the closing sentence shouldn't be in Release and promotion instead?
The Tournado 2006 trek was before the album was recorded so it wouldn't make sense to put with the release info. Yeepsi (talk) 11:13, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
""21", "Island", "Hurry", "Something Left to Give", "Need to Love" and "What You Want"" → "the track, alongside "21", "Island", "Hurry", "Something Left to Give" and "Need to Love""
Not done "contributed percussionthe track," → "contributed percussion to the track," --Kyle Peake (talk) 16:57, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"was announced for release in July" → "was announced for release in July of that year"
"for streaming on May 17" → "for streaming on May 17, 2007"
Mention the single release was in the US or add more citations to that ref for backing up it was in various countries
[26][27][28] should all be solely at the end of the sentence
"and was released to radio a week later" → "and was serviced to radio a week later" with the target
"From early July to late August 2007" → "From early July to late August" since the tour's year being mentioned makes it specific that this was in 2007
"On July 18, a music video" → "On July 18 of that year, a music video" with the wikilink
"that was filmed in California in early June" → "that had been filmed in California during early June"
"on July 27,[32] and was released on July 31" → "on July 27, 2007, and was released on July 31"
[25][32] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
Not done they need to be numerically ordered --Kyle Peake (talk) 16:57, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
[33][34] ditto
Mention the album release was in the US or add more citations to that ref for backing up it was in various countries
"the latter released in January 2008, include" → "the latter of which was released in January 2008, both include"
"on a headlining US tour with support" → "on a headlining US tour, with support"
"In February 2008, the Starting Line appeared at the Soundwave Festival in Australia[37]" → "The Starting Line appeared at the Soundwave Festival in Australia, in February 2008,"
[37][38][39] should all be solely at the end of the sentence
"on which they were supported" → "during which they were supported"
"Four Year Strong[38] and" → "Four Year Strong, and"
[40][41] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
Target to The Bamboozle should solely be on Bamboozle instead of Bamboozle festivals
"Following this, the group went on indefinite hiatus" → "Following on from this, the band went on an indefinite hiatus"
The first para should be the last of the section instead and move the first sentence of it to being the third instead
"selling 20,000 copies in its first week" → "with first-week sales of 20,000 copies"
"The album has been cited" → "It has been cited"
"The album received a mostly positive reaction from music critics" → "Direction was met with mostly positive reviews from music critics" with the target
"said the band conceptualized" → "said the Starting Line conceptualized"
"noted while it retained the pop punk" → "noted that while it retained the pop punk"
"it comes across as slightly more" → "the album came across as slightly more"
"found while Vasoli lacked" → "found that while Vasoli lacks"
"he and the rest of the band" → "he and the other members"
Track listing per booklet.[13] → Track listing adapted from the booklet of Direction.[13]
Writer(s) and Producer(s) should be included here; if all tracks were written and/or producer by certain member(s), just write that at the bottom with source
Are you sure refs 1 and 19 don't violate WP:USERGEN since they are from forum threads?
They're written by staff members. Yeepsi (talk) 11:13, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I am aware of that but why is showthread in the title and then there's forum style replies below? Still unsure about this... --Kyle Peake (talk) 16:57, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
FWIW, all news/interviews/band pages on that website had the showthread in the URL. The website's actual forum/message board had a slightly different layout. (As a side note, Rock Sound's website used to have the same kind of layout until they changed it 2007/8.) Yeepsi (talk) 17:17, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Oh thanks for making me aware of that, since nothing writes AbsolutePunk, criterion 2b is now a pass --Kyle Peake (talk) 17:50, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Refs 5, 17 and 35 should cite Punk News as the publisher instead
Ref 6 should be titled Photos : Youtube.com instead
Ditto for refs 10 and 31 because it is clear they aren't duplicates due to the different archive dates
Not done I meant to title them all the same since that's accurate --Kyle Peake (talk) 16:57, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove SPIN Staff from ref 12 since that's not a name and delete the publisher parameter too