Talk:Charlotte Lewis (Lost)/GA1

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Cool article. Poor Charlotte; she died too young. lol. Please address each objection one-by-one, I'll strike them as we go.

Intro:

• Wikilink "season four" in the first reference, not the second

Done. Sanders11 (talk) 18:28, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

• Should Oceanic Flight 815 be wikilinkd to Oceanic Airlines? I'll leave that one up to you.

Done. Sanders11 (talk) 18:28, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

• I tripped over this. Could you consider rewording? "until he agrees for her to switch places with another person on Charlotte's mission"

"but later switches place with another person on her team" - any better? Sanders11 (talk) 18:28, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

Arc:

• "to work on a mission to the island where the survivors of Oceanic Flight 815 had crashed" This is missing something. Should it be "a mission to find the island"?

Done, I've always been confused by what the freighter crew's mission actually was. Sanders11 (talk) 18:28, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

• "While at the beach that night, she tests Faraday's memory with playing cards, noting he has made progress when he can remember two out of three cards." There's no context to this. Did Faraday lose his memory or something? This should be noted before...

Not sure what to do about this. There are a few implications throughout the season that Faraday has memory issues, but it's not really been addressed. I could remove it if you think that's best (although I have heard his memory issues will be addressed this season so might be able to add better context then). Sanders11 (talk) 18:28, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

• Shouldn't there be some mention in here of when she, Faraday and Miles are captured by the Others, starting in the episode Jarhead?

Done, and added a little context to who the Others are. Sanders11 (talk) 18:28, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

Development:

• "This "opened up another dimension [to the character that the producer's] hadn't foreseen"," Can you please attribute this to whoever specifically said it within the sentence?

Unfortunately I can't get the website to load, so I'll address this later on. Sanders11 (talk) 18:28, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

• "Rebecca Mader's audition scene was a fake flashback and she was disappointed that it was not used for the show." I didn't hear it in here, but is there any more specific info on what the fake flashback scene included?

Seeing if I can find anything... Sanders11 (talk) 18:28, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

• "and "an important clue to places [the show was] going at the end of the [fourth] season"." This needs attribution as well.

Done. Sanders11 (talk) 18:28, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

References:

• There are two redlinks in the references list (#10 and #24). Can you take care of those? (Either fix the wikilinks, or drop them if there is no page for them)

Delinked. Sanders11 (talk) 18:28, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

Good luck! — Hunter Kahn _(contribs) 17:21, 23 April 2009 (UTC)

A good article is:

1. Well-written: Prose is good, MOS is good.
2. Factually accurate and verifiable: Sources are good, no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage: Covers main aspects, no unneeded detail.
4. Neutral: Yes.
5. Stable: Yes.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by images: Yes.

Nice job. Pass. — Hunter Kahn _(contribs) 03:25, 24 April 2009 (UTC)