Talk:Bob McCallister/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:57, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "head pro" is that "professional"?

• Had to search that one up – means golf teacher/instructor. Should I replace "head pro" with "golf instructor" (either for one of its mentions or all)? —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• "him to have a go at the" to try the

• Replaced. —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• "member of the golf team" don't link golf at this point.

• Fixed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• "several PGA Tour events" link PGA Tour here.

• Linked. —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• "turned professional in " we have professional golf.

• Pipelinked to professional golfer (because professional golf looks like a disambiguation page). —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• "on the Tour one" no need to capitalise, this isn't the full formal name.

• Fixed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• "record of shooting a 62 " this means nothing to non-golf experts.

• Specified that it means "score of" and pipelinked to Par (score)#Course and tournament scores. —Bloom6132 (talk) 02:19, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "on the Tour" see above.

• Done. —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• "and pocketed" won.

• Replaced. —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• "by five strokes" what is that?

• Same meaning as "X# of shots" (e.g. "ahead by two shots" and "coming two shots short" later in the article). —Bloom6132 (talk) 02:19, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "35-foot" convert.

• Done. —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• "21-foot" same.

• Done. —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• What's a "sectional event"?

• I think it means a kind of tournament (I'm not really familiar with golf jargon). —Bloom6132 (talk) 02:19, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• Why not use full dates in the results table?

• Fixed with {{dts}} template. —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• Not essential but would be good to have row and col scopes per MOS:DTT in that results table.

• Added. —Bloom6132 (talk) 10:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

• Refs 3, 9, 12 are lacking publisher info.

• Added (along with archive URLs for dead links). —Bloom6132 (talk) 02:19, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have on a first pass. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:23, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: thanks very much for the review! I hope I've addressed your comments satisfactorily. —Bloom6132 (talk) 02:19, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Could I also trouble you to hold off promotion for a few days? An editor from WP:GOLF reverted my edits adding full dates and scope rows per your comments above. I've since reverted him explaining that this was in response to GAN feedback and hope this doesn't descend into an edit war. —Bloom6132 (talk) 02:19, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Okay, well Jimmymci234 should know that if the Golf project is against using row scopes and proper dates, then they are in the wrong. The project-wide guidelines supersede these parochial project "rules". The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 07:16, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

I've reverted that using the rationale you gave (thanks for that). The editor I referring to above was actually Tewapack, who made the initial revert. —Bloom6132 (talk) 08:40, 4 September 2021 (UTC)