Talk:21st Waffen Mountain Division of the SS Skanderbeg/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 17:09, 23 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:09, 23 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • The survivors were incorporated: it was disbanded on 1 November 1944 and was incorporated into the 7th SS
  • This is awkward. Do you mean "mainly taken from"... Also the reader already knows that the banovinas were Yugoslav. And what's a banovina, explain or link. Italian Albania was expanded to include adjacent parts of Yugoslavia mainly excised from the Yugoslav banovinas
  • Also awkward. And was Kosovo part of the above mentioned banovinas? With the region of Kosovo being annexed to Albania, Kosovo Albanians welcomed the Italian occupation enthusiastically.
  • The article needs a good copyedit. Please contact Diannaa (talk · contribs) or anyone from the WP:GOCE|Guild of Copyeditors for assistance and let me know once it has been edited so I can continue this review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:58, 25 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done -- Dianna (talk) 02:28, 25 May 2013 (UTC) I have now done two passes and am satisfied the prose meets the GA guideline. If there's a lot more new material added another pass might be required. -- Dianna (talk) 17:35, 26 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The last sentence of the last para in the Background section needs to be removed unless a cite can be found that supports the statements. P. 165 of Lepre doesn't not refer to anything other than the use of I./28 as a cadre for the division. Page number(s) to support the formation of the Albanian battalion need to be added.
  • Change disarm division battalions to "disarm battalions of the division"
Done.
  • Clarify this to ensure that the reader understands that both the division and the kampgruppe withdrew: The division withdrew across the Drina
  • Not thrilled about the uniform picture. Can't you find a picture of division members in combat or on parade or something that will be copyright free?

I've added a picture of the division's recruiting poster.

  • Capitalize the entire title of Kumm's book.

Done.

  • Brigadeführer etc. is overlinked.

Fixed.

  • Neuhammer needs to be disambiguated.

Done. 23 editor (talk) 00:52, 28 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • External links good as are picture licenses.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:34, 27 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Don't forget my point about the last sentence of the last para in the background section above. It's the last thing that needs to be addressed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:09, 3 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sorry about that Sturm, I was curious to see where that came from and it took some finding. Way before my time...[1]! I re-instated it verbatim after the Lepre refs were removed... whoops. Anywho, gone now and I fixed the Lepre ref to the recruitment of the Albanians. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 06:30, 3 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]