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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:24, 2 March 2011 (UTC)
- I fixed a dab link (audio mixing → Live sound mixing ) please check
- ELs are clean
- "The double-disc release features a recording of their headlining performance at the 2009 Download Festival along with a 45-minute behind the scenes documentary created by percussionist Shawn Crahan, and the four music videos from All Hope Is Gone." - comma after Festival, and link music video
- "and it included free giveaways" - not mentioned later
- If you are going to mention individual reviews in the lead I think you should cite them here.
- Why? they're not quotations, and quotes are generally the only things required to have references in the lead.
- Expand the lead to include charts
- Release date and genres are in infobox, but not in body
- I added the release date, but isn't the genre explained in American heavy metal band Slipknot? CrowzRSA 02:00, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- OK, leave heavy metal there, but I suggest removing nu metal, and alternative metal. And the release date still is not in the body. Adabow (talk · contribs) 03:33, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- There have been SEVERAL discussions on whether putting genres like nu metal and alternative metal and it always comes down to weather or not sources list them as that genre, and allmusic refers to most of the songs (both live and studio) to be either nu metal or alternative metal, and the whole (sic)nesses page ([1]) lists it as heavy metal.
- Not good to start the body with "It"
- Comma after "Shawn Crahan stated that"
- Indicate that Gray was a member of the band
- Link MSN
- "Shawn Crahan attended the New York event" - don't need his first name again
- Album title in Crahan's quote should be italicised
- "The DVD was released on September 28, 2010 sold 9,300 copies" - missing word
- Link and italicse Billboard
- Why are other charts not mentioned in prose?
- I removed the sentence, as all of the chart positions can be found in the "Charts and certifications" section. CrowzRSA 02:00, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- Would the music videos not start at chapter 19?
- How about "legal names" instead of "real names"?
- Is there a reason that the band members are in descending order? Ascending would seem more logical.
- Italicise album title whenever it occurs
- The Charts and certifications table is a bit confusing, as it kinda implies that the Top Music Video Chart is responsible for the certification, when Billboard do not have anything to do with certs
On hold now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:24, 2 March 2011 (UTC)