Talk:Pry (novel)

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some notes for improvement[edit]

hello from the wikiconference!

so imo, the major theme for improvement in this article is how it frames facts as original research. maybe try to reframe this as facts, especially the origins and influences. for example, saying that “pry is not the first of its kind” is unsourced. proving that pry wasn't groundbreaking doesn't really belong on wikipedia, instead you could change origins and influences into more of a context of what was happening in the multimedia world when pry was created. for example, if you can any media/people that the creators cited as influences would definitely belong. a key part of this is adding more citations, pretty much everything should be cited. when you say it is influential, you need sources to back that up. what you have in the external links section is a great start - summarizing reviews with small quotations would definitely belong in the reception area though!

more minor things: make sure you're not repeating information too much, like for example the story structure and navigation section is pretty much a repeat of the intro paragraph.

i think you're already working on making the summary more concise, which is great! good work so far, just needs definitely more citations and proving that what you're saying isn't just your own takeaways from experiencing the media, but are more factual.

Hillsyism (talk) 20:54, 10 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your edits! LoveElectronicLiterature (talk) 03:06, 15 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

hi, i agree with the coments above. need to summarize the plot rather than cover it all. here are some references -

keep up the good work --Sitesimu (talk) 15:05, 11 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your time! LoveElectronicLiterature (talk) 03:06, 15 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]