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Boot Monument[edit]
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If you travel to Saratoga National Historic Park, you will probably come across this somewhat bizarre monument of a boot. Its honoree's name is never mentioned on it, and it would take some research to figure out that it's actually honoring Benedict Arnold. I am nominating this for A-class because I'd like to take this to FA and so I would need to see what further improvements need to be made to it to get it there. Thank you! Relativity ⚡️ 00:47, 1 May 2024 (UTC)
This is all way outside my area of expertise. I presume that Benedict Arnold was rehabilitated long ago. Article looks more like a GA than an FA. Some comments:
- Can be have a consistent date format? Three different ones are used. (Recommend using dmy and adding a {{use dmy dates}} template.)
Done
- "Arnold's betrayal to the British" implies that someone betrayed him.
- Changed to "Arnold betrayed the Continental Army for the British Army"
- Do we know what Arnold's actual, rank was? (Same for Clinton, Gates and Lincoln)
- Yes, and Done
- Yes, and
- Is there any reason why the town of West Point was worth twenty thousand quid?
- According to Nathaniel Philbrick's Valiant Ambition, the Hudson River was a large and strategically important river. The fortifications at West Point were on an "S" bend at the river and whoever controlled West Point essentially controlled the Hudson River itself. Since capturing the Hudson River would mean a huge military success to the British if they could capture it, which meant capturing West Point, that meant it was worth a lot of money. Should I add that to the article, or something shorter, such as "for the capture of West Point, a fortification that was important to the control of the Hudson River"?
- The lead says he "attempted to give crucial information about the fortification of West Point to the British" but the body says "offering Arnold £20,000 for the capture of West Point. Arnold met with British Major John André, who Arnold had solicited communication through, and André was later captured on his way back to New York with the plans for West Point being discovered"
- Good catch, reworded in the lead to "He later attempted to help the British capture the fortification of West Point but was discovered and fled to the British army."
- "solicited communication through" sounds awkward to me.
- Reworded to "Arnold met with British Major John André so he could pass on information on how to best attack West Point,". Let me know what you think.
- "College boys on a trip stole the toe and spur from the Boot Monument,[21][22] and they were only discovered when an anonymous informer informed the battlefield official that the toe was stolen by "a graduate of a New York State educational institution."[23] The monument underwent restoration after Adolph S. Ochs, publisher of The New York Times, financed it." Do we have dates for these events?
- Unfortunately no. All of the newspapers used as citations are from around the same time but there is no actual specified date when this happened.
- "The monument is made of white marble[2][43] and is four feet tall." Source required for the height. And add a conversion for those of us living in the twenty-first century instead of the eighteenth.
Matarisvan[edit]
Hi Relativity, some comments:
- Provide a link or identifier for "The Shrine of the Memorial Museum"? If you received it via resource request, specify that in a hidden note?
- That source was there before I started extensively editing this article. I tried to find it, but couldn't. Since there's another source there, I've removed it.
- Here is a link for Leopold 1994: [1]. Consider adding?
Added, thanks for finding that. Hopefully, I've done it correctly.
- Link to Lawrence Journal-World, The Lewiston Daily Sun and Boca Raton News as done for the other newspapers? Also I guess Ration is a typo, should be Raton?
- Done, and yes, that was a typo. I fixed that as well.
- Provide a link for Duffus 1930 and MacIvor 1954?
- For the MacIvor one, I found it off of the Wikipedia Library, and can't seem to find a way to add a link to it other than having a link go directly to the Wikipedia Library. Here's the permalink: [2]. I added an ISSN though for it. As for Duffus' source, I found the link, but there's an error page saying that there are technical difficulties with it showing up. I've added it for now, and I'll see if I can do anything else about that.
- Link to Social Forces, McFarland, The New England Quarterly, University Press of New England, NYU Press, Regnery Publishing, The Journal of the Gilded Age and Progressive Era, Casemate Publishers? You've already linked to Random House so to be consistent you will have to link everywhere else. Otherwise you could consider removing the links for publishers altogether.
- Done and added one for William Morrow and Company as well.
- Add a date for Brumwell? The website provides one.
- Done
- What is your policy on linking to authors? I can understand if you do not wish to in order to avoid SEAOFBLUE. If you do wish to, however, consider linking to Alexis Coe, Gary Alan Fine, Donald W. Linebaugh, Richard M. Ketchum, James Kirby Martin, Dave Richard Palmer, Nathaniel Philbrick, Willard Sterne Randall?
- Done Not a huge fan of the SEAOFBLUE, but I think that it's better this way.
- To be consistent, you will have to decide to include the locations of publication or not. For most sources you have them, but for some you don't.
- Done
That's all from me, cheers Matarisvan (talk) 05:29, 30 May 2024 (UTC)
- @Matarisvan: Thanks so much for the review. I think that I've addressed all of your concerns above. Cheers Relativity ⚡️ 21:09, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Gog the Mild: I've addressed both reviews above. Relativity ⚡️ 21:21, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Relativity, you should consider changing the references from ref tags to sfn tags, because that will be required at FAC. Also you should add the Wikipedia Library link for MacIvor 1954 which you have. Matarisvan (talk) 05:06, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Matarisvan: Both Done Relativity ⚡️ 19:08, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Matarisvan: Both
Gog the Mild[edit]
Saving a place. Could you ping me once the review above has ended. Thanks. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:11, 1 June 2024 (UTC)