Talk:1970 Caribbean–Azores hurricane/GA1

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Reviewer: Cyclonebiskit (talk) 15:41, 10 January 2011 (UTC) I will be reviewing this article, I'll have the full review completed within the next hour.[reply]

  • "On October 8, the depression crossed over the eastern portion of the Dominican Republic, and subsequently it accelerated to the northeast." - Minor factual error. Use eastern portion of Hispanola or just Dominican Republic, your choice of which one.
  • At the start of the Meteorological history, you link Africa on its second use rather than its first. Also, why link it here and not in the lede?
  • "The system exited the west coast of Africa the next day, and on September 24 it developed into a tropical depression about 95 mi (153 km) southwest of Conakry, Guinea." - Comma after 24
    • I personally disagree. Too many commas disrupt the flow. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:42, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "On October 7, the depression attained its lowest pressure of 1000 mbar..." - Convert mbar to inHg
  • "The next day, it made landfall and crossed eastern Dominican Republic." - Where did it make landfall?
  • "After exiting into the Atlantic Ocean, the depression accelerated to the northeast, followed by an eastward turn on October 10 before another turn to the northeast." - I'm not a fan of this sentence but I don't know what can be done to change it without adding "fluff". If you can think of a way to reword this, good. Otherwise it can just be left as is.
    • Yea, given it is the end of its MH, and there isn't much else to say about it, I'd prefer to leave it. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:42, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "By October 12, the depression could no longer be classified as a tropical cyclone, although satellite imagery indicated its remnants continued northeastward." - To an average reader who doesn't understand the specifics of degeneration, they could see this as the storm dissipating yet not dissipating at the same time (latter part of the sentence states a contrary to something not mentioned earlier).
    • Notice, I didn't say it dissipated. I carefully chose the wording per MWR and HURDAT. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:42, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...suppressed by a strong high pressure area to its north. It re-intensified while crossing through the Azores, attaining a pressure of 994 mbar." - Same as previous pressure comment. Also, was the system extratropical by this time or was it a "strong" remnant low?
    • The available sources don't indicate its structure at the time. It isn't in HURDAT, so it couldn't be tropical, that's all I know. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:42, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "On or around October 3, forecasters advised residents on islands from Barbados and St. Vincent through to Guadeloupe to prepare for floods, high seas, and gale-force gusts." - Just use around. Link St. Vincent and Guadeloupe.
  • "As it crossed through the islands, it produced heavy rainfall, including 8.90 in (226 mm) on Saint Lucia, 2.19 in (56 mm) on Dominica..." - What's "it", the gusts? Previous sentences give no indication of what you're referring to. Also link Dominica
  • "In the latter island, the depression left 200 people homeless, caused $500,000 in damage, and killed three people." - Going by order of importance, I would put the fatalities first, though, technically it doesn't matter.
    • Oh, I prefer putting them incremental orders of importance. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:42, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is there any additional information for the USVI aside from the two sentences in the article?
  • Puerto Rico is linke on its second use in the Preparations and impact section rather than its first.
    • Remnants of the disorganized mess while producing the article. Fixed --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:42, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "This was the highest rainfall total from a tropical cyclone on record in Puerto Rico, surpassing the deadly hurricanes of 1928 and 1899." - Maybe add how much these storms dropped to give context of how much the record was surpassed.
  • "At least 600 houses were destroyed and another 1000 damaged." - change 1000 to 1,000
  • Barceloneta is linked on its second use rather than its first
  • "Flooding forced the closure of Puerto Rico Highway 2 between Manati and Barceloneta, Puerto Rico." - per above, delink Barceloneta. Also, the second use of Puerto Rico isn't needed.
  • "The depression left more than $40 million (1970 USD) in crop damage..." - Add inflated value
  • "...primarily to the sugar cane and coffee..." - The sugar cane? The one and only? You catch my drift here, right?
  • I did a brief check of news sources and it appears that many of them claim higher fatality totals than stated in this article. I think that these reports should be mentioned at least briefly.
    • The reason being is that most of them claim the missing as fatalities, and they say that outright. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 23:53, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The National Guard, the Red Cross, and others helped displaced persons." - specify what the others were, as in other people, other agencies, other fund raises, ect...
  • In doing some source searching of my own, I discovered a USGS piece not used here. I'm not sure if it as any additional information so please read through it. There may also be some additional information in the previously mentioned news sources.
    • Yea, I saw that before while researching the storm, and there isn't anything new... same death and damage toll. The only thing it added was clarifying where the rains were, but as the rains affected the whole island, I didn't think it was worth adding. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 23:53, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Most of the issues are minor and can easily be fixed. A few are the need for additional information which shouldn't take long. I'll be glad to pass this article once the comments are met. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 16:11, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I still have to get a few things, which I'll do later on. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:42, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It looks like all but one comment has been addressed. "Is there any additional information for the USVI aside from the two sentences in the article?" Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:14, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Ah, got that now. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:52, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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