Talk:St Annes Pier/GA1
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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum (talk · contribs · count) 20:45, 25 September 2011 (UTC)
- Lead
- "The pier was originally intended to be a sedate promenading venue for the resort's visitors, but further attractions were later added." It doesn't really make sense to talk about "further attractions" before we've talked about any attractions.
- "Steamer services to Blackpool and Liverpool were disrupted by changes made to the estuary channels." That's a bit vague. Changes caused by the construction of the pier?
- Background
- "The company directors believed that a pier at St Anne's would have more favourable conditions for fishing and boating than those at neighbouring resorts." Not quite sure what that means. Would offer visitors better conditions for fishing and boating?
- Construction
- "These changes meant that the pier was eventually left on dry land, ruining the resort's steamer trade." Not quite sure what "these changes" is referring to here. The dredging of the river channels? The construction of the jetty? Both?
- Attractions
- "... the developers of St Anne's were keen to attract a more refined market than the working-class excursionists that visited Blackpool". I realise that "excursionist" is a proper word, so you're obviously quite at liberty to keep it, but it looks really odd to me, added to which a little redundant; it's obvious that excursionists must be visiting somewhere. What about something like "the developers of St Anne's were keen to a attract a more refined market than Blackpool's working-class visitors"?
- Is the pier still open today? What attractions does it offer now? I'm not sure in general if the article quite tells us enough about the structure of the pier. For instance, the English Heritage entry talks about the wooden deck being enclosed for three-quarters of its length and two hexagonal platforms beyond.
Thanks very much for the review. I'll get started on this today.--BelovedFreak 12:16, 27 September 2011 (UTC)
I'm struggling a bit for time at the moment, but should be able to get back to finish this on Sunday, if not before.--BelovedFreak 09:55, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
- That's fine, there's no great rush. Malleus Fatuorum 12:58, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
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