Talk:Ho Ho Ho (album)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:43, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

by American singer RuPaul → you should specify that he's a drag queen, as well here

Added. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

written by Joe Carrano and RuPaul → state "written by Joe Carrano and RuPaul" here for alternation

I do not see the difference that you are pointing out; could you please explain this to me? Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: OMG, I meant "written by Joe Carrano and the singer", sorry ;)

specifically "All Alone on Christmas" → specifically of "All Alone on Christmas"

I do not believe that this is correct; "specifically" without the "of" is the appropriate construction in this context. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

negatively responded → other way round

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

of his VH1 talk show The RuPaul Show → when was this?

Added year. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox[edit]

Only link "executive producer" once in the "Producer" row

Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Recording and release[edit]

saying "You can hear us → saying, "You can hear us

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

a clear message; RuPaul explained: "Even the → a clear message, "Even

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Rhino executive promoted → what does it mean to promote smth executive?

An executive is a job title so it is referencing an executive from the record label and how he or she promoted something. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

was made available on on October 28, 1997 → we only need one "on"

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Composition[edit]

"the fact that I'm doing it" → "the fact that [he is] doing it"

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The final track is a remix of the "Celebrate" → "his" instead of "the"

I do not believe that is correct. This is the final track of the album; if you put "his final track" that is implying that it is RuPaul's final song ever, which is obviously not true as he released albums/songs after that and is still releasing music. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

It peaked at number 31 on Billboard Dance Club Songs chart on October 11, 1997 and remained on the chart for a total of seven weeks.[13] → This isn't relevant in any sort of way here, so I would suggest removing it.

If you clicked on the link, you would notice that Billboard attributes the song to this album. I would imagine that commercial performance of a song would be relevant to the album in which the song appears. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Reception[edit]

Ken Veeder of The Advocate praised RuPual's → "RuPaul's" is written incorrectly

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

positivel responding → "positively" is written incorrectly

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Melinda Newman referenced the album → Melinda Newman referenced the album to

I use the construction "reference x as"; the construction "reference x to" would not be appropriate in this context. Aoba47 (talk) 17:24, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"[m]akes me want to shove a candy cane in my eye" → "[m]akes [him] want to shove a candy cane in [her] eye"

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Connect the third paragraph to the second one

Not done as these two paragraphs are discussing two completely different ideas. The second paragraph is about negative reviews while the third is about a more joke review. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Include the info about the commercial performance above in the "Charts" section

Not done as I prefer to keep the commercial performance close to the Reception section, as done in Good Girl Gone Bad and 4 (Beyoncé album). Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Track listing[edit]

Corrected things here by myself

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Personnel[edit]

Change all "-"s to "–"

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Track listing[edit]

Fixed all alone here

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Other stuff[edit]

Copy-violation[edit]

33.3% is still acceptable!

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Links[edit]

2 problems to be fixed here!

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

References[edit]

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

No dead links! Good job!

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Outcome[edit]

On hold for 7 days! GREAT job with the article!! Best regards and good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Thank you for the review. I have addressed your comments above. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

'Passing this! YAY! Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:53, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.