Talk:Endless Night (The Lion King song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 16:37, 9 February 2018 (UTC)

I will review this article. Thank you.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 16:37, 9 February 2018 (UTC)

Comments

• "The composition was done by Mark A. Brymer and the lyrics were written by American theatre director Julie Taymor." — Rephrase it as "The composition was done by Mark A. Brymer while American theatre director Julie Taymor wrote the lyrics."

• Rephrased. Aoba47 (talk) 17:27, 12 February 2018 (UTC)

• "The track was first performed and recorded by American performer Jason Raize" — Rephrase it as "The track was first performed and recorded by American actor and singer"

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 17:27, 12 February 2018 (UTC)

• "who originated the role of Simba for the musical;" — Rephrase it as "who played the role of Simba in the musical;"

• Not done. The verb "originated" means something different than "played". The current word means that he was the first actor to play the role, and went through the workshop phase of the musical too. Aoba47 (talk) 17:27, 12 February 2018 (UTC)

• "The song's melody is based on the one from "Lala" from the 1995 soundtrack album Rhythm of the Pride Lands." — Rephrase it as "The song's melody is based on "Lala" from the 1995 soundtrack album Rhythm of the Pride Lands."

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 17:27, 12 February 2018 (UTC)

• "grieving the death of his father" — Rephrase it as "grieving over his father's death".

• I do not think that the "over" part is necessary. Aoba47 (talk) 17:27, 12 February 2018 (UTC)

• Page number missing for reference number 5.

• I accessed this source through GoogleBooks and it unfortunately did not have page numbers. Aoba47 (talk) 17:27, 12 February 2018 (UTC)

Other than this, a neat little article, Aoba47. Address these comments and it will be promoted.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 10:25, 12 February 2018 (UTC)

• Thank you for the review! I believe that I have addressed everything. Have a wonderful rest of your day and/or night! Aoba47 (talk) 17:27, 12 February 2018 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.

   Pass or Fail:

Thank you for addressing my comments.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 09:25, 13 February 2018 (UTC)